Will you read this and give me critique/ideas?

The only suggestion I have is to keep writing. It's such a good story. Actually I would like to read the rest of it. Could you finish it and post it on here or something? Or maybe post it on a website or blog or something. This is such a good story and there actually isn't anything wrong with it. You're a REALLY great writer and should definitely continue the awesome work. Hmmmm, maybe you could get rid of the part where her mom starts to cry it's kind of pointless. Like, yeah she was selfish and didn't make the right decision but it's not something to really cry about. I think the mom should be comforting and kind but strong and should have some kind of mystery behind her. Like her background with having the same problem her daughter has kind of adds some strength and even a little wisdom to her. It also adds a little weight as well so maybe she shouldn't seem like a minor character. Then again you only gave us a portion of your writing so I can only get an idea of what the mom is like but other than that nothing else should be changed.